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~Charlotte Grace, the Mind Traveler

Editing of DQZ: Day One

Today I started to edit my first OYAN novel, Dyani: The Quest for Zuriel.
I've started just by reading through it and taking notes of what needs to be changed.  I'm almost through it all.

I have three (albeit small) pages of notes.

It's rather overwhelming for me, but I'm consoling myself by telling myself that at least I can see what needs to be fixed.

A few things are:

• It moves too fast.
• I need more hoops from the actual villain.
• Change the villain's name.
• More character development for Niyet, Sheol (whose name will be changed), Yevriel, Fairn, Jalem and Alistair. 
• Setting...
• Durn [the dog] attacking Yevriel is almost a given that Yevriel is bad.
• Change the villain's background.
• There are some questions that go unanswered.

 I actually have thirty-one notes, and I think I badly need to re-write chapters nine through eleven.  I have a feeling that I'll have to keep reminding myself it's only a first draft.

~Charlotte Grace, the Mind Traveler